These are some of the things I am thinking about after reading the first part of the story.
I feel curious about the house and the man out walking seems to also be curious. I wonder if there are people moving in or out of the house and why there appears to be no activity.
I wonder if this is a house in a suburb or maybe in a remote area. I kind of picture maybe a new neighborhood.
I wonder why the man feels like he needs to approach the house.
The first bit: An air of quiet expectation in the first paragraph--a new year, everything quiet, a guy out walking. Wondering why he's looking "into windows."
The airplane plume is okay with this theme but the sunrise description as "like an oozing wound" is jarring. Something bad going to happen? Negative view of the world?
Then there's signs of activity--U-haul with the doors open, house doors open--but no people. And the guy out walking "looks at the house behind him"--which befuddled me for a moment--had to reread to see that the house with the truck is across the street, so presumably the "house behind him" is on his side of the street"--then he goes over to the scene.
So, keeping in mind that jarring note of the oozing sunrise, I'm wondering: Is he a nosey or curious guy who wants to find out if someone needs help? Or has he been planning some kind of crime? I ended this reading—suspicious!
These are some of the things I am thinking about after reading the first part of the story.
I feel curious about the house and the man out walking seems to also be curious. I wonder if there are people moving in or out of the house and why there appears to be no activity.
I wonder if this is a house in a suburb or maybe in a remote area. I kind of picture maybe a new neighborhood.
I wonder why the man feels like he needs to approach the house.
Maybe he will find someone dead inside the house.
The first bit: An air of quiet expectation in the first paragraph--a new year, everything quiet, a guy out walking. Wondering why he's looking "into windows."
The airplane plume is okay with this theme but the sunrise description as "like an oozing wound" is jarring. Something bad going to happen? Negative view of the world?
Then there's signs of activity--U-haul with the doors open, house doors open--but no people. And the guy out walking "looks at the house behind him"--which befuddled me for a moment--had to reread to see that the house with the truck is across the street, so presumably the "house behind him" is on his side of the street"--then he goes over to the scene.
So, keeping in mind that jarring note of the oozing sunrise, I'm wondering: Is he a nosey or curious guy who wants to find out if someone needs help? Or has he been planning some kind of crime? I ended this reading—suspicious!
And away we go!
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